COMPUTER SYSTEMS RESEARCH
Student Research 3rd Quarter 2006-2007
Evaluations of papers - 4th quarter

Project Papers, Preliminary for 4th quarter, 2006-2007 2nd Period, part 1

Student	Project	LaTeX	Title, Abstract	Introduction	Background
D. Friedheim	Implementation of Steganographic Techniques	no	okay	1 paragraph, 4 sentences, expand on this.	2 paragraphs, 1/2 page, can be expanded. What similar work can you reference?
S. Fuqua, A. Street, B. Trzcinski	Network-based Modular Communications Protocol	yes	Okay - but take out the hyperbole - unjustifiable claim - "revolutionsizes..."	Avoid hyperboles - "countless innovations"	1 paragraph, 3 sentences. Expand on the background structure, architecture, of NCP. What exactly makes a difference with other versions of similar products? What's the advantage of NCP. What similar work can you reference?
K. Liu	Image Filter Techniques	no	Abstract okay, but probably needs to be updated?	Avoid hyperboles - "wide and important uses", "Any field of work..." - use specifics rather than generalities. Update - "surveying a pool of people" - you're not doing this?	Some of this Background can go into the Intro on image processing. In this Background, also talk about your specific techniques, algorithms. What similar work can you reference?
T. Morgan	Algorithm Efficiency and Data Structure Design	yes	okay, does the abstract need to be updated?	No introduction - Introduce the concepts of your project	Background can be background of your specific project, the ideas your project is implementing. What similar work can you reference?
S. Oetjen	Graphical Display of Physics Simulation	yes	good, check for any final updating necessary	Good, introduces the specifics of this project.	good, includes reference to a similar project, physics background needed for this project.
J. Sherwood	Modeling of Economics	no	Avoid hyperboles - "immensely complex system", "millions of interactions..", "..theory decrees...", "primary catalyst for the well informed..." Keep to specifically describing what your project is about.	Avoid hyperboles - "...huge repository of data...", "...vast quantity...", Be specific with your references, justifiable qualifiers - what "previous attempts"?	Previous work? Methodology and technical problems - these parts are good, detailing your own project.
E. Silbermann	Computer Language Design and Domain Specific Languages	yes	more specifics of your actual project. Does the abstract need to updated?	not much, 1 paragraph, 3 sentences. Expand on an introduction to your project, motivation, introduce all the work you've done this year.	Expand on the background to your project, don't need much description of IF games, focus on cs issues, programming theory, this is also a research paper,not just a project program you're writing.
A. Street	Network-based Modular Communications Protocol	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above
M. Tao	Decentralized Process Destribution	yes	Avoid hyperboles - "enormous amount of data...". "rough of the data?" Otherwise okay	Expand/update an introduction to your project? So far 2 paragraphs on Intro/Background	Expand/update background for your project? Other solutions that currently exist? So far only 2 paragraphs for intro/background
B. Trzcinski	Network-based Modular Communications Protocol	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above
S. Ulery	French/English Translation	yes	Good, but try not to be negative in the sentence about "insufficient resources", maybe another way to say the same thing without those words?	Good introduction, need any final expanding for the final version?	Good background, need any final expanding for the final version? 2 pages total for the intro/background.

Project Papers, Preliminary for 4th quarter, 2006-2007 2nd Period, part 2

Student Project Development sections Visuals, charts, graphs Results, conclusions Bibliography Appendix

D. Friedheim Implementation of Steganographic Techniques 4 paragraphs, 1 page, expand upon what you've done. Same screenshot as 2nd quarter Almost none, 1 screenshot of a run. More diagrams? a WAV packet? Not much, expand on how you're testing, your methods 4 references, twice as many? none, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

S. Fuqua, A. Street, B. Trzcinski Network-based Modular Communications Protocol 3+ pages, pretty good so far. More about testing methods? How are you determining whether a piece is successful? Expand on other development issues during the year? 3 screenshots. Do you want any architectural diagrams, flowcharts? More of a wrap up is needed. Successes, non-successes during the year? 5 references, any more? 10 would be good. yes, code. Any sample tests that could be put here?

K. Liu Image Filter Techniques Code excerpts - you don't need the entire code necessarily. Tighten up which pieces of code you need to reference. Not much - 2 pictures, before and after filter. Any other diagrams? - such as a diagram of the process, how it's working. Other relevant tests on other images? How are you testing success of your algorithms/code? At this point, what are the results/conclusions you can draw? Not many, 2 references. Hopefully you can have closer to 10. None, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

T. Morgan Algorithm Efficiency and Data Structure Design Not much development writing, 3 paragraphs, 6 sentences. Expand on your work you've done this year. Not much, 1 image of a tree. Maybe more diagrams of your processes. Examples of testing? Expand on how you've tested, evaluated. Expand on your results? not many, 3 references. Hopefully you can have 10 or so. None, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

S. Oetjen Graphical Display of Physics Simulation Good description of the project and its development. Any final additions necessary? Good coverage of the specific tests that are being used, how performance is being validated. Formulas, charts, graphs of tests are used as visuals. Also any screenshots? Good, 9 references None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

J. Sherwood Modeling of Economics Almost the same as 2nd quarter vers. Process specifics and Regression, these are good, referencing your own work. Can these long paragraphs be broken up? Go into detail about how you're testing and evaluating for validation and accuracy. Short term predictions vs long term. Various types of stock, is there a difference? This is an ongoing project, but come to a conclusion for this year. None, what diagrams, charts can you think of to use? None, you need to reference other sources. This is a research project too, not just your own ideas. None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

E. Silbermann Computer Language Design and Domain Specific Languages Almost the same as 2nd quarter vers. Good start on p. 3 about instance.eval, but needs to be expanded upon. Otherwise not much to say for the year. One misspelling Not many, 3 code excerpts. Anything else? Structural diagrams or flowcharts? Not much, results look as if dependent upon users, Not much feedback from users? None, this is also a research paper, nice to have 8-10 references after a year None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

A. Street Network-based Modular Communications Protocol see S. Fuqua above see S. Fuqua above see S. Fuqua above see S. Fuqua above see S. Fuqua above

M. Tao Decentralized Process Destribution Almost the same as 2nd quarter vers. Sending hello messages. What about recognizing tasks? Anything to write about? none Not much analysis, results, conclusions to report on. 5 references, hopefully could have about twice that. None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

B. Trzcinski Network-based Modular Communications Protocol see S. Fuqua above see S. Fuqua above see S. Fuqua above see S. Fuqua above see S. Fuqua above

S. Ulery French/English Translation Good description of your programming ideas and experiences. Can this be combined with the 2nd semester work, all into 1 paper? Screenshots. Any diagrams outlining (statistical) techniques in language translation? Your results can include perhaps a summary conclusion of the state of this science - speech and language processing (in a positive light) good references, more if you have any (try for 10?) You could include some of your code or API, or any testing you've done

Student	Project	Development sections	Visuals, charts, graphs	Results, conclusions	Bibliography	Appendix
D. Friedheim	Implementation of Steganographic Techniques	4 paragraphs, 1 page, expand upon what you've done. Same screenshot as 2nd quarter	Almost none, 1 screenshot of a run. More diagrams? a WAV packet?	Not much, expand on how you're testing, your methods	4 references, twice as many?	none, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
S. Fuqua, A. Street, B. Trzcinski	Network-based Modular Communications Protocol	3+ pages, pretty good so far. More about testing methods? How are you determining whether a piece is successful? Expand on other development issues during the year?	3 screenshots. Do you want any architectural diagrams, flowcharts?	More of a wrap up is needed. Successes, non-successes during the year?	5 references, any more? 10 would be good.	yes, code. Any sample tests that could be put here?
K. Liu	Image Filter Techniques	Code excerpts - you don't need the entire code necessarily. Tighten up which pieces of code you need to reference.	Not much - 2 pictures, before and after filter. Any other diagrams? - such as a diagram of the process, how it's working. Other relevant tests on other images?	How are you testing success of your algorithms/code? At this point, what are the results/conclusions you can draw?	Not many, 2 references. Hopefully you can have closer to 10.	None, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
T. Morgan	Algorithm Efficiency and Data Structure Design	Not much development writing, 3 paragraphs, 6 sentences. Expand on your work you've done this year.	Not much, 1 image of a tree. Maybe more diagrams of your processes. Examples of testing?	Expand on how you've tested, evaluated. Expand on your results?	not many, 3 references. Hopefully you can have 10 or so.	None, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
S. Oetjen	Graphical Display of Physics Simulation	Good description of the project and its development. Any final additions necessary?	Good coverage of the specific tests that are being used, how performance is being validated.	Formulas, charts, graphs of tests are used as visuals. Also any screenshots?	Good, 9 references	None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
J. Sherwood	Modeling of Economics	Almost the same as 2nd quarter vers. Process specifics and Regression, these are good, referencing your own work. Can these long paragraphs be broken up?	Go into detail about how you're testing and evaluating for validation and accuracy. Short term predictions vs long term. Various types of stock, is there a difference? This is an ongoing project, but come to a conclusion for this year.	None, what diagrams, charts can you think of to use?	None, you need to reference other sources. This is a research project too, not just your own ideas.	None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
E. Silbermann	Computer Language Design and Domain Specific Languages	Almost the same as 2nd quarter vers. Good start on p. 3 about instance.eval, but needs to be expanded upon. Otherwise not much to say for the year. One misspelling	Not many, 3 code excerpts. Anything else? Structural diagrams or flowcharts?	Not much, results look as if dependent upon users, Not much feedback from users?	None, this is also a research paper, nice to have 8-10 references after a year	None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
A. Street	Network-based Modular Communications Protocol	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above
M. Tao	Decentralized Process Destribution	Almost the same as 2nd quarter vers. Sending hello messages. What about recognizing tasks? Anything to write about?	none	Not much analysis, results, conclusions to report on.	5 references, hopefully could have about twice that.	None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
B. Trzcinski	Network-based Modular Communications Protocol	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above	see S. Fuqua above
S. Ulery	French/English Translation	Good description of your programming ideas and experiences. Can this be combined with the 2nd semester work, all into 1 paper?	Screenshots. Any diagrams outlining (statistical) techniques in language translation?	Your results can include perhaps a summary conclusion of the state of this science - speech and language processing (in a positive light)	good references, more if you have any (try for 10?)	You could include some of your code or API, or any testing you've done

Project Papers, Preliminary for 4th quarter, 2006-2007 3rd Period, part 1

Student Project LaTeX Title, Abstract Introduction Background

H. Beddo Applications of Genetic Algorithms yes 1.Update the title 2. Expand the abstract, it's only 1 sentence. 4 sentences plus 1 fragment. Expand the introduction Background on genetic algorithms is pretty good

T. Hunter-Kilmer Investigations of Cellular Automata yes Okay, but say more about your project specifically, not just Conway's Okay, maybe expand upon. Currently 1/2 page, 4 paragraphs. "fiddled"? Only 2 paragraphs, expand? Any comparable studies that exist already? If yes, this could strengthen your paper.

A. Katkova TJ Hall Modeling yes Good. Need to put (MultiAgent... from GMU) to explain MASON? No simulation for TJ, but there are probably evacuation or traffic scenarios that exist for other situations. Good intro, need any more ideas added for the final version? Finish up the "- later" piece? Any other last additions for the final version?

T. McNeill Modular Architecture for Computer Game Design yes okay, check the wording of the last sentence - "required have any..." good intro, need any other ideas to add for the final version? good background, need any other ideas to add for the final version?

P. Mutchler Music Editing/Composition Software yes avoid hyperboles - "current...expensive, complicated..., poor teaching tool". Focus on your project, not sure you need to justify how yours is better than others Hyperboles - "no effort.." not sure you can validate this. Purpose section is good. Careful about cutting down Sibelius - it has teaching tools. You can describe these other products without having to justify your version as better?

O. Ponomarenko Map Navigation Using A* Search yes Good, except there's an incomplete sentence at the end. Avoid hyperboles - "problem facing commercial programs", otherwise okay. Need to expand any more about your own project for the final version? Avoid hyperboles - "obviously", "isn't a lot of research on complex graph traversal and path finding". You could expand on the background research, existing tools in this area.

L. Rumpf Human Cognitive Emulation NO PAPER NO PAPER can't pass without a paper --- ---

E. Turner Evolution Simulator yes Good, think of fine tuning for final version. Other advantages/comparisons simulation vs real environment? Good Good, use of references within the background section. 2 sections of background – biology and computer science.

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Student	Project	LaTeX	Title, Abstract	Introduction	Background
H. Beddo	Applications of Genetic Algorithms	yes	1.Update the title 2. Expand the abstract, it's only 1 sentence.	4 sentences plus 1 fragment. Expand the introduction	Background on genetic algorithms is pretty good
T. Hunter-Kilmer	Investigations of Cellular Automata	yes	Okay, but say more about your project specifically, not just Conway's	Okay, maybe expand upon. Currently 1/2 page, 4 paragraphs. "fiddled"?	Only 2 paragraphs, expand? Any comparable studies that exist already? If yes, this could strengthen your paper.
A. Katkova	TJ Hall Modeling	yes	Good. Need to put (MultiAgent... from GMU) to explain MASON?	No simulation for TJ, but there are probably evacuation or traffic scenarios that exist for other situations. Good intro, need any more ideas added for the final version?	Finish up the "- later" piece? Any other last additions for the final version?
T. McNeill	Modular Architecture for Computer Game Design	yes	okay, check the wording of the last sentence - "required have any..."	good intro, need any other ideas to add for the final version?	good background, need any other ideas to add for the final version?
P. Mutchler	Music Editing/Composition Software	yes	avoid hyperboles - "current...expensive, complicated..., poor teaching tool". Focus on your project, not sure you need to justify how yours is better than others	Hyperboles - "no effort.." not sure you can validate this. Purpose section is good.	Careful about cutting down Sibelius - it has teaching tools. You can describe these other products without having to justify your version as better?
O. Ponomarenko	Map Navigation Using A* Search	yes	Good, except there's an incomplete sentence at the end.	Avoid hyperboles - "problem facing commercial programs", otherwise okay. Need to expand any more about your own project for the final version?	Avoid hyperboles - "obviously", "isn't a lot of research on complex graph traversal and path finding". You could expand on the background research, existing tools in this area.
L. Rumpf	Human Cognitive Emulation	NO PAPER	NO PAPER can't pass without a paper	---	---
E. Turner	Evolution Simulator	yes	Good, think of fine tuning for final version. Other advantages/comparisons simulation vs real environment?	Good	Good, use of references within the background section. 2 sections of background – biology and computer science.
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Project Papers, Preliminary for 4th quarter, 2006-2007 3rd Period, part 2

Student Project Development sections Visuals, charts, graphs Results, conclusions Bibliography Appendix

H. Beddo Applications of Genetic Algorithms Minimal development section. 1 page, 2 paragraphs. Needs to be written and finished. Almost none - 1 chart from the text. None Almost none - 1 book only, need more references on GA None, no code attachments, other analysis

T. Hunter-Kilmer Investigations of Cellular Automata Not much different from 2nd quarter version. Need to expand a lot on all your analysis and testing. Be very detailed. None. can include screenshots of various states and competitions, diagrams of various tournament results, test scenarios Minimal analysis - need to expand on this 5 references, try for a few more? None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

A. Katkova TJ Hall Modeling Good so far. Any other testing now besides visual? Graphing? Diagram of class relationships, 1 screenshot - any others for the final version - graphs? Need to wrap things up with results/conclusion writing 5 references, any more? None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

T. McNeill Modular Architecture for Computer Game Design Same as the 2nd quarter version? The paper starts good, but goes nowhere – not much on development of your actual project for the year. None. Include any screenshots NOT the Cheney version, diagrams of your architecture? Not much, you need this final analyis, discussion, conclusion, wrap up None. This project is also supposed to be research, not just your own program. 8-10 references. You have 3 references listed separately, include these in your paper. None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

P. Mutchler Music Editing/Composition Software Good writing about your project development so far. Needs to be finished up. Not sure you need the Sibelius and Lilypond screenshots so large, try a smaller versions and compare with yours Conclusions, wrapup? How did you test your program through the year? None - you need references, this project is also a research project, not just your own program. None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

O. Ponomarenko Map Navigation Using A* Search Same as the 2nd quarter version? Good start, discussion about Map generator. Needs to be expanded beyond this, what are you doing with the map generator? Need testing and analysis. None. Screenshots? Diagrams of your algorithms? Flowcharts, structural diagrams? How are you testing? "difference between right and left turns.." how are you seeing this? "The addition of obstacles..." - how are you testing this? None. In addition to writing your own program, this is also a research paper - 8 to 10 references None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

L. Rumpf Human Cognitive Emulation NO PAPER NO PAPER can't pass without a paper --- --- ---

E. Turner Evolution Simulator Development sections - environments, food, organisms, ai, viewing data. Experiments - population trends, genetic trends. Good one version of paper I have doesn't have visuals - are these in a separate document? Graphs, screenshots, good Expand, finalize your conclusions for this end of year version. Include feedback from users? Tutorial version 5 references, any more? Think about what can go in the appendix section(s), extra and additional items not in the paper.

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Student	Project	Development sections	Visuals, charts, graphs	Results, conclusions	Bibliography	Appendix
H. Beddo	Applications of Genetic Algorithms	Minimal development section. 1 page, 2 paragraphs. Needs to be written and finished.	Almost none - 1 chart from the text.	None	Almost none - 1 book only, need more references on GA	None, no code attachments, other analysis
T. Hunter-Kilmer	Investigations of Cellular Automata	Not much different from 2nd quarter version. Need to expand a lot on all your analysis and testing. Be very detailed.	None. can include screenshots of various states and competitions, diagrams of various tournament results, test scenarios	Minimal analysis - need to expand on this	5 references, try for a few more?	None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
A. Katkova	TJ Hall Modeling	Good so far. Any other testing now besides visual? Graphing?	Diagram of class relationships, 1 screenshot - any others for the final version - graphs?	Need to wrap things up with results/conclusion writing	5 references, any more?	None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
T. McNeill	Modular Architecture for Computer Game Design	Same as the 2nd quarter version? The paper starts good, but goes nowhere – not much on development of your actual project for the year.	None. Include any screenshots NOT the Cheney version, diagrams of your architecture?	Not much, you need this final analyis, discussion, conclusion, wrap up	None. This project is also supposed to be research, not just your own program. 8-10 references. You have 3 references listed separately, include these in your paper.	None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
P. Mutchler	Music Editing/Composition Software	Good writing about your project development so far. Needs to be finished up.	Not sure you need the Sibelius and Lilypond screenshots so large, try a smaller versions and compare with yours	Conclusions, wrapup? How did you test your program through the year?	None - you need references, this project is also a research project, not just your own program.	None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
O. Ponomarenko	Map Navigation Using A* Search	Same as the 2nd quarter version? Good start, discussion about Map generator. Needs to be expanded beyond this, what are you doing with the map generator? Need testing and analysis.	None. Screenshots? Diagrams of your algorithms? Flowcharts, structural diagrams?	How are you testing? "difference between right and left turns.." how are you seeing this? "The addition of obstacles..." - how are you testing this?	None. In addition to writing your own program, this is also a research paper - 8 to 10 references	None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
L. Rumpf	Human Cognitive Emulation	NO PAPER	NO PAPER can't pass without a paper	---	---	---
E. Turner	Evolution Simulator	Development sections - environments, food, organisms, ai, viewing data. Experiments - population trends, genetic trends. Good	one version of paper I have doesn't have visuals - are these in a separate document? Graphs, screenshots, good	Expand, finalize your conclusions for this end of year version. Include feedback from users? Tutorial version	5 references, any more?	Think about what can go in the appendix section(s), extra and additional items not in the paper.
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Project Papers, Preliminary for 4th quarter, 2006-2007 5th Period, part 1

Student Project LaTeX Title, Abstract Introduction Background

J. Chen Applications of Neural Networks yes Too much background info. Instead provide overview of your own project's purpose. Expand on your last sentence. Too wide a focus - stock market, compression of data, music composition. Have you done any of these? Pick one to focus on. Write about what you've actually done. Okay, although the background should focus on what you've actually done.

L. Jepsen Traffic Light Simulation yes Good. avoid "etc" at the end of the sentence, too general. Good. "People..."? maybe "Cars" instead? Avoid the hyperbole - "..have always caused problems...", "sit at the light for hours..." "A lot of research..." need to specify

K. Kassing 3D Visualization and Graphics Engine yes Good. Avoid hyperboles - "Plenty of.." "THe"- fix this. Expand intro at all? maybe not necessary - leads into your Background Vertex vs skeletal models. Skeletal slower than vertex models. Good overview.

L. Kearsely Hybrid AI and Machine Learning Systems yes Good. Watch out for the hyperbole - "Many different..." without specifics. Good. Neural net and subsumption architectures. Compare to use of a single network model. Good, similar research projects referenced.

F. Pareja-Lecaros Finite State Machines and Game Design NO PAPER NO PAPER can't pass without a paper --- ---

D. Phillips Effect of Size and Information on Unique-Bid Auctions yes Okay Write the intro as sentences,not numbered items for problem statement and goal? Multiplayer, sealed-bid, unique bid auction, computer networking, ai, graphical interface and displays. Careful of hyperboles - "relatively undiscovered tool..." "Disregarded as useless.."? - Purpose to help understand this new auction type. No previous work? similar to research done in experimental economics.

P. Riggs TJ School Hallway Design NO PAPER NO PAPER can't pass without a paper --- ---

N. Sidawy Applications of Machine Learning with Othello yes Take out the word "Draft" in your title. Watch out for hyperboles - "...is an exciting new field...", "...is incredibly important...", "..in order to learn...one must start with...". Stick with statements like your last one - those that are specific to your own project. Problem statement is not a complete sentence. Do you need this Problem statement? maybe just start with the Purpose and Goal? "First..." this is not a complete sentence. I don't think the "Second..." is a complete sentence either. Reword. "The project was a great success"? - another hyperbole probably. Chess Master - 10th edition, not 10th addition.

R. Srigiriraju Intranet Module: Implementation of a 4-Function Calculator yes Good, check to see if it needs final updating Good, scope of study, purpose Good references to other similar work.

A. Wang End-to-end Publication Using Bittorrent yes okay Avoid hyperbole statements - " ...current...is much more complicated and is inaccessible to the normal user...". This system would be "superior" - this needs justification. "P2P though the use..." - should be "through the use..."? "...plethora of..." - better to list a few specifically. You do this in the Background section.

B. Ward Chaos Theory Using Supercomputing yes Some of this abstract can be shifted to Background or Intro? - The parts about chaos theory and butterfly effect. Expand upon the last sentence - this is the type of info for the abstract – an overview of what is specific to your project. Can you write out the text for the intro, rather than enumerating - listing by numbers. Section on previous work looks good, does this need any expansion for the final version?

R. Ward ACO: Ant Colony Optimization yes good, any final need for updating? Intro section? Text to introduce your project in detail? good - any final need for updating?

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Student	Project	LaTeX	Title, Abstract	Introduction	Background
J. Chen	Applications of Neural Networks	yes	Too much background info. Instead provide overview of your own project's purpose. Expand on your last sentence.	Too wide a focus - stock market, compression of data, music composition. Have you done any of these? Pick one to focus on. Write about what you've actually done.	Okay, although the background should focus on what you've actually done.
L. Jepsen	Traffic Light Simulation	yes	Good. avoid "etc" at the end of the sentence, too general.	Good. "People..."? maybe "Cars" instead?	Avoid the hyperbole - "..have always caused problems...", "sit at the light for hours..." "A lot of research..." need to specify
K. Kassing	3D Visualization and Graphics Engine	yes	Good. Avoid hyperboles - "Plenty of.."	"THe"- fix this. Expand intro at all? maybe not necessary - leads into your Background	Vertex vs skeletal models. Skeletal slower than vertex models. Good overview.
L. Kearsely	Hybrid AI and Machine Learning Systems	yes	Good. Watch out for the hyperbole - "Many different..." without specifics.	Good. Neural net and subsumption architectures. Compare to use of a single network model.	Good, similar research projects referenced.
F. Pareja-Lecaros	Finite State Machines and Game Design	NO PAPER	NO PAPER can't pass without a paper	---	---
D. Phillips	Effect of Size and Information on Unique-Bid Auctions	yes	Okay	Write the intro as sentences,not numbered items for problem statement and goal? Multiplayer, sealed-bid, unique bid auction, computer networking, ai, graphical interface and displays. Careful of hyperboles - "relatively undiscovered tool..." "Disregarded as useless.."? - Purpose to help understand this new auction type.	No previous work? similar to research done in experimental economics.
P. Riggs	TJ School Hallway Design	NO PAPER	NO PAPER can't pass without a paper	---	---
N. Sidawy	Applications of Machine Learning with Othello	yes	Take out the word "Draft" in your title. Watch out for hyperboles - "...is an exciting new field...", "...is incredibly important...", "..in order to learn...one must start with...". Stick with statements like your last one - those that are specific to your own project.	Problem statement is not a complete sentence. Do you need this Problem statement? maybe just start with the Purpose and Goal? "First..." this is not a complete sentence. I don't think the "Second..." is a complete sentence either. Reword. "The project was a great success"? - another hyperbole probably.	Chess Master - 10th edition, not 10th addition.
R. Srigiriraju	Intranet Module: Implementation of a 4-Function Calculator	yes	Good, check to see if it needs final updating	Good, scope of study, purpose	Good references to other similar work.
A. Wang	End-to-end Publication Using Bittorrent	yes	okay	Avoid hyperbole statements - " ...current...is much more complicated and is inaccessible to the normal user...". This system would be "superior" - this needs justification. "P2P though the use..." - should be "through the use..."?	"...plethora of..." - better to list a few specifically. You do this in the Background section.
B. Ward	Chaos Theory Using Supercomputing	yes	Some of this abstract can be shifted to Background or Intro? - The parts about chaos theory and butterfly effect. Expand upon the last sentence - this is the type of info for the abstract – an overview of what is specific to your project.	Can you write out the text for the intro, rather than enumerating - listing by numbers.	Section on previous work looks good, does this need any expansion for the final version?
R. Ward	ACO: Ant Colony Optimization	yes	good, any final need for updating?	Intro section? Text to introduce your project in detail?	good - any final need for updating?
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Project Papers, Preliminary for 4th quarter, 2006-2007 5th Period, part 2

Student Project Development sections Visuals, charts, graphs Results, conclusions Bibliography Appendix

J. Chen Applications of Neural Networks Only one page. Need to expand on what you've actually done specifically - Neuron, Network, Cases. How have you tested, validated your work? 1/2 page longer than 2nd quarter version. None, 1 formula Where's your validation on predicting past stock performance? Where's your data, testing methods, actual results. 4 references, need twice as many. None, code API, extra testing data, results

L. Jepsen Traffic Light Simulation Misspelling - "bsaic". Visual component, also ability to store numerical data and graph results. Light algorithm - split the long paragraph up into 2 or more? Graphs - perhaps can expand on the functions of the graphs, how they can be used for analysis and testing. Screenshots. Include graphs too? Any diagrams of your processes, algorithms? No conclusions yet - these need to be written. Think about how you're testing your project for efficiencies of various light algorithms. No bibliography. In addition to this being a program you're writing, you need to be doing research too, was hoping for 8-10 references. You had 3 in your 2nd quarter version. None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

K. Kassing 3D Visualization and Graphics Engine Common feature sets for different 3D engines. Optimized math library - how? need to be specific? Top level mesh library. Main event loop described. Math routines - expand? Material definitions - expand? Mesh functions, particle engine, debugging tools. Screenshot - rendering a model, wireframe version. -Particle effects. Results and discussion - need to expand for this final version? 7 references, good, any more? What can go in an appendix? Extra items that you don't include in the paper, but may be interesting to look through

L. Kearsely Hybrid AI and Machine Learning Systems Development pt 1, pt 2, 1 1/2 pages. Do you want to expand on this? is it detailed enough for all the work you've done? None. Think of some diagrams, flowcharts, structural drawings, screenshots you can use for visual display of information Results not complete. This section needs to be finished. 4 references, any more? Code API, anything else that would be interesting to include, but won't be in the paper?

F. Pareja-Lecaros Finite State Machines and Game Design NO PAPER NO PAPER can't pass without a paper --- --- ---

D. Phillips Effect of Size and Information on Unique-Bid Auctions 3rd quarter version is not much different from 2nd quarter vers. Procedure explained. Not much after that. Preliminary testing is explained in 1 paragraph. None. Think of visuals you can use to display information. Screenshots, some kind of diagrams to explain, illustrate unique bid auctions? Not much testing done yet. Except for single computer mode – maybe focus on this if the networking doesn't come through. None. This is not only a program you're writing, but a research project too, hopefully you can have 8-10 references None currently. Code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper

P. Riggs TJ School Hallway Design NO PAPER NO PAPER can't pass without a paper --- --- ---

N. Sidawy Applications of Machine Learning with Othello Description of ply and minimax algorithms, evaluation functions. Iteration 2 uses GA to find best values for evaluating board states. Description of GA follows. Iteration 3 - the machine learning portion - storing information with Hash Map. Iteration 4 - unfinished? Not sure you need the walking robot picture? Screenshot of his board, ply tree, crossover with GA, data snapshot for ml. More specifics about actual tests you've run, rather than just writing about what you're going to do. We need actual test data, results at this point. 4 references, any more - like to have 8-10 if possible API, data from tests, other items that would be interesting to look at, but aren't in the main paper.

R. Srigiriraju Intranet Module: Implementation of a 4-Function Calculator Development plan, testing requirements, design criteria, 4 different data structures, runtime process. You should include your work and analysis of the white space elimination problem, it's interesting in all its analysis and testing methods 2 screenshots. what other diagrams can you include, structural or flowchart type of diagrams? Also, how about a visualization of the white space problem. More of a detailed account of testing? Working out possible solutions to the white space problem? 3 references, any more? API, other interesting items that won't be in the main paper

A. Wang End-to-end Publication Using Bittorrent Planning section - better to write this out rather than numerically listing? Section on testing is in the right direction - clarify, write about the tests so that it's clear to the reader what's going on. Need more than just the simple network pictures. Would use of charts help clarify your testing and what it means? None now, this needs to be finalized None. The project is not only a program you're writing, but research too. List references, hopefully 8-10. API, data from tests, other items that would be interesting to look at, but aren't in the main paper.

B. Ward Chaos Theory Using Supercomputing Good start, now you need to clarify exactly what you've done. Clarify your testing you've done. Any code excerpts , or pseudo code may help Need to expand upon the testing you've done. Charts or graphs or diagrams would help. None. Any screenshots, charts, diagrams, pseudo code of algorithms? 4 references, any more? Hopefully 8-10 API, data from tests, other items that would be interesting to look at, but aren't in the main paper.

R. Ward ACO: Ant Colony Optimization You can probably expand on this section. Include graphs, charts, diagrams that can help explain your process and algorithms and all the tests you've done Not much about the testing and analysis you've done. This part needs to be completed None - need visuals that help explain your project, the ideas and analysis you've done. None? Need references. API, data from tests, other items that would be interesting to look at, but aren't in the main paper.

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Student	Project	Development sections	Visuals, charts, graphs	Results, conclusions	Bibliography	Appendix
J. Chen	Applications of Neural Networks	Only one page. Need to expand on what you've actually done specifically - Neuron, Network, Cases. How have you tested, validated your work? 1/2 page longer than 2nd quarter version.	None, 1 formula	Where's your validation on predicting past stock performance? Where's your data, testing methods, actual results.	4 references, need twice as many.	None, code API, extra testing data, results
L. Jepsen	Traffic Light Simulation	Misspelling - "bsaic". Visual component, also ability to store numerical data and graph results. Light algorithm - split the long paragraph up into 2 or more? Graphs - perhaps can expand on the functions of the graphs, how they can be used for analysis and testing.	Screenshots. Include graphs too? Any diagrams of your processes, algorithms?	No conclusions yet - these need to be written. Think about how you're testing your project for efficiencies of various light algorithms.	No bibliography. In addition to this being a program you're writing, you need to be doing research too, was hoping for 8-10 references. You had 3 in your 2nd quarter version.	None currently, code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
K. Kassing	3D Visualization and Graphics Engine	Common feature sets for different 3D engines. Optimized math library - how? need to be specific? Top level mesh library. Main event loop described. Math routines - expand? Material definitions - expand? Mesh functions, particle engine, debugging tools.	Screenshot - rendering a model, wireframe version. -Particle effects.	Results and discussion - need to expand for this final version?	7 references, good, any more?	What can go in an appendix? Extra items that you don't include in the paper, but may be interesting to look through
L. Kearsely	Hybrid AI and Machine Learning Systems	Development pt 1, pt 2, 1 1/2 pages. Do you want to expand on this? is it detailed enough for all the work you've done?	None. Think of some diagrams, flowcharts, structural drawings, screenshots you can use for visual display of information	Results not complete. This section needs to be finished.	4 references, any more?	Code API, anything else that would be interesting to include, but won't be in the paper?
F. Pareja-Lecaros	Finite State Machines and Game Design	NO PAPER	NO PAPER can't pass without a paper	---	---	---
D. Phillips	Effect of Size and Information on Unique-Bid Auctions	3rd quarter version is not much different from 2nd quarter vers. Procedure explained. Not much after that. Preliminary testing is explained in 1 paragraph.	None. Think of visuals you can use to display information. Screenshots, some kind of diagrams to explain, illustrate unique bid auctions?	Not much testing done yet. Except for single computer mode – maybe focus on this if the networking doesn't come through.	None. This is not only a program you're writing, but a research project too, hopefully you can have 8-10 references	None currently. Code listings, other tests that aren't in main paper
P. Riggs	TJ School Hallway Design	NO PAPER	NO PAPER can't pass without a paper	---	---	---
N. Sidawy	Applications of Machine Learning with Othello	Description of ply and minimax algorithms, evaluation functions. Iteration 2 uses GA to find best values for evaluating board states. Description of GA follows. Iteration 3 - the machine learning portion - storing information with Hash Map. Iteration 4 - unfinished?	Not sure you need the walking robot picture? Screenshot of his board, ply tree, crossover with GA, data snapshot for ml.	More specifics about actual tests you've run, rather than just writing about what you're going to do. We need actual test data, results at this point.	4 references, any more - like to have 8-10 if possible	API, data from tests, other items that would be interesting to look at, but aren't in the main paper.
R. Srigiriraju	Intranet Module: Implementation of a 4-Function Calculator	Development plan, testing requirements, design criteria, 4 different data structures, runtime process. You should include your work and analysis of the white space elimination problem, it's interesting in all its analysis and testing methods	2 screenshots. what other diagrams can you include, structural or flowchart type of diagrams? Also, how about a visualization of the white space problem.	More of a detailed account of testing? Working out possible solutions to the white space problem?	3 references, any more?	API, other interesting items that won't be in the main paper
A. Wang	End-to-end Publication Using Bittorrent	Planning section - better to write this out rather than numerically listing? Section on testing is in the right direction - clarify, write about the tests so that it's clear to the reader what's going on.	Need more than just the simple network pictures. Would use of charts help clarify your testing and what it means?	None now, this needs to be finalized	None. The project is not only a program you're writing, but research too. List references, hopefully 8-10.	API, data from tests, other items that would be interesting to look at, but aren't in the main paper.
B. Ward	Chaos Theory Using Supercomputing	Good start, now you need to clarify exactly what you've done. Clarify your testing you've done. Any code excerpts , or pseudo code may help	Need to expand upon the testing you've done. Charts or graphs or diagrams would help.	None. Any screenshots, charts, diagrams, pseudo code of algorithms?	4 references, any more? Hopefully 8-10	API, data from tests, other items that would be interesting to look at, but aren't in the main paper.
R. Ward	ACO: Ant Colony Optimization	You can probably expand on this section. Include graphs, charts, diagrams that can help explain your process and algorithms and all the tests you've done	Not much about the testing and analysis you've done. This part needs to be completed	None - need visuals that help explain your project, the ideas and analysis you've done.	None? Need references.	API, data from tests, other items that would be interesting to look at, but aren't in the main paper.
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2nd Period
1. Daniel Friedheim, Proposal: Implementation of Steganographic Techniques (Cryptography). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
2. Steven Fuqua, Proposal: Modular Communications Protocol (Networking). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code API, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code API and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
3. Kevin Liu, Proposal: Image Filter Techniques (Computer Vision). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code1, code2, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. (1st quarter - mentorship)
4. Thomas Morgan, Proposal: Algorithm Efficiency and Data Structure Design (Algorithms and Data Structures). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code1, code2, code3, code4, code5, code6 and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and RAT and RBT code and java code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
5. Steven Oetjen, Proposal: Graphical Display of Physical Models (Computer Modeling). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
6. John Sherwood, Proposal: Modeling of Economics (Modeling of Complex Systems). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter, project website.
7. Evan Silberman, Proposal: Computer Language Design and Domain Specific Languages (Computer Languages). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation (handouts), and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
8. Andrew Street, Proposal: Modular Communications Protocol (Networking). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code API, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code API and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter
9. Yu Suo, Proposal: Concept Visualization for Semantic Networks and Ontologies of Learning Agents (Artificial Intelligence). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
10. Michael Tao, Proposal: Decentralized Process Distribution (High Performance, Distributed Computing). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
11. Barnett Trzcinski, Proposal: Modular Communications Protocol - Group proposal, and individual proposal (Networking). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code API, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code API and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
12. Sharon Ulery, Proposal: French/English Translation (Computational Linguistics). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, codeAPI, code and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper and visuals, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
3rd Period
1. Harry Beddo, Proposal: Machine Learning Applications with the Game Checkers (Computer AI). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter. Research links: AI
2. Timothy (Timmy) Hunter-Kilmer, Proposal: Cellular Automata (Artificial Life). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
3. Olesya (Alex) Katkova, Proposal: Modeling of Hall Traffic at TJ (Agent-based Modeling). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code1, code2, code3, code4, code5, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
4. Edward (Teddy) McNeill, Proposal: Modular Architecture for Computer Game Design (Object Oriented Design Techniques, Software Engineering) . 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
5. Patrick Mutchler, Proposal: Music Editing/Composition Software (Computer Music/AI). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
6. Oleksander Ponomarenko, Proposal:Map Navigation Using A* Search. 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
7. Richard (Lee) Rumpf, Proposal: Human Cognitive Emulation(Computer Modeling/AI). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
8. Eric Turner, Proposal: Evolution Simulator (Artificial Life) . 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter, screenshot 1
5th Period
1. Cheng (Jeff) Chen, Proposal: Applications of Neural Networks (AI). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code API, code1, code2, code3, code4, code 5 and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter (never received for 1st quarter).
2. Lynn Jepsen, Proposal: Simulation of Traffic Lights (Agent-based Modeling). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
3. Kevin Kassing, Proposal: Development of a 3D Graphics Engine (Computer Graphics). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
4. Logan Kearsley, Proposal: Hybrid AI and Machine Learning Systems (Machine Learning/Artificial Life). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code1, code2 and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
5. Francisco Pareja-Lecaros, Proposal: Finite State Machines and Game Design (Algorithms and Data Structures). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter (never received for 1st quarter).
6. David Phillips, Proposal: Effect of Size and Information on Unique-Bid Auctions (Computer Modeling of Complex Systems). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
7. Peter Riggs, Proposal: TJ School Hallway Design (Computer Modeling). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
8. Nicholas Sidawy, Proposal: Artificial Intelligence and Machine Learning with Othello (HCI/Machine Learning). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
9. Ramesh Srigiriraju, Proposal: Intranet Module: Implementation of a Graphing Calculator (Software Engineering). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
10. Andrew Wang, Proposal: End-to-end Publication Using Bittorrent (Computer Networking). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper and images for the paper, poster, presentation, and code for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
11. Bryan Ward, Proposal: (old version) Chaos Theory Using Supercomputing (Parallel Programming, High Performance Computing). 3rd quarter: paper, poster, presentation, code1, code2, code3, code4, code5, code6 and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
12. Ryan Ward, Proposal: ACO: Ant Colony Optimization (Algorithms, Agent-based modeling). Dynamic TSP Applet (Java 1.6 vers), (Java 1.4 vers), 3rd quarter work: paper, poster, presentation, code, and 3rd quarter summary. Earlier work: paper, poster, presentation, and code and work for 2nd quarter. Poster and presentation for 1st quarter.
Mentorship Students
1. Lee Burton (Summer/Fall mentorship), TASC Component Architecture and Simulation Environment (TCASE) (Systems Modeling, Northrop Grumman IT), paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter.
2. Ankur Desai (Summer/Fall - Per. 7 Strong), Implementation of Artificial Physics Using AIBO Robot and the Pyro Programming Environment (AI Robotics, NRL), paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter.
3. David Kohlbrenner (Fall Mentorship - IT.com), Prelim Proposal1: , paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter.
4. Sarah Laskey (Summer/Fall - Per. 7 Strong), Assessing Terrorism Threat Rankings to Specific Sites (Risk Analysis, Digital Sandbox)
5. Shiqian (Kevin) Liu (Fall Mentorship - Astute Tech), Prelim Proposal1:
6. Myles Maxfield (Summer/Fall - Per. 3 Cammer), Integrated Spell Checker and Search Engine (Internet AI, IT.com), paper, poster (two slides), and presentation for 2nd quarter.
7. Jonathan Reed (Summer/Fall - Per.7 Strong), Use of the Latent Dirichlet Allocation (LDA) Algorithm and Applications With An Intranet Search Program (Internet Datamining and AI search, IT.com), paper, poster (2 slides), and presentation for 2nd quarter.
8. Karl Shurter (Fall - Mentorship - GMU Experimental Economics), Prelim Proposal1: paper, poster, and presentation, project description for 2nd quarter.
9. Christopher Sweeney (Fall - Mentorship - Mitre Tech), Prelim Proposal1: , paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter.
10. Sean Tai (Summer/Fall - Per. 2 Pearce), Designing a View Management System for Augmented Reality (Virtual Reality Systems, NRL)
11. Brian Wu,Traffic Management, Turner-Fairbank Highway Research Center (TFHRC), Highway Driving Simulator, project description, paper, poster, and presentation for 2nd quarter.
Documents for grading
1. Research paper criteria
2. Powerpoint slides for oral presentation
3. Due dates for mentorship students, tech writing course Fall 2006

COMPUTER SYSTEMS RESEARCH Student Research 3rd Quarter 2006-2007 Evaluations of papers - 4th quarter